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Apr 10, 2011 13:49:57 GMT -5
Post by BeautifulDreamer on Apr 10, 2011 13:49:57 GMT -5
hey guys so i've been writing a little something and i need peeps to look it over for me i allready have most of it looked over and there will be alot added to them later on my printed off papers have so many markings on them but i really would like to have an honest outsiders opinion and stuff since my buddy kortnee graduated i don't really have someone who i can trust to be brutaly honest with me on this stuff
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Apr 10, 2011 13:52:21 GMT -5
Post by ***Stormchaser*** on Apr 10, 2011 13:52:21 GMT -5
i was going to comment on it but i wasn't sure if you were going to add more chapters today
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Apr 10, 2011 13:54:27 GMT -5
Post by BeautifulDreamer on Apr 10, 2011 13:54:27 GMT -5
lol ivev been going over chapter four really carefully and thats why i put up the support thingy
so you guys can give me stuffes here i thought it would be better dat way den....ya lol
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Apr 10, 2011 13:58:16 GMT -5
Post by ***Stormchaser*** on Apr 10, 2011 13:58:16 GMT -5
lol ok, well so far i like it, i've only read one and skimmed two so far so i can't give much input yet but i really like the idea
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Apr 10, 2011 14:07:24 GMT -5
Post by BeautifulDreamer on Apr 10, 2011 14:07:24 GMT -5
^^ dnakya i think lol
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Apr 10, 2011 14:08:45 GMT -5
Post by ***Stormchaser*** on Apr 10, 2011 14:08:45 GMT -5
lol
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Apr 10, 2011 14:39:44 GMT -5
Post by BeautifulDreamer on Apr 10, 2011 14:39:44 GMT -5
eh he
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Apr 10, 2011 14:42:39 GMT -5
Post by ***Stormchaser*** on Apr 10, 2011 14:42:39 GMT -5
okay so i have a question about ch 2
did she purposly fall off the rail or did she just sort of go into a daze adn loose her balance?
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Apr 10, 2011 15:38:15 GMT -5
Post by BeautifulDreamer on Apr 10, 2011 15:38:15 GMT -5
hold up i think i put something in there but let me check
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Apr 10, 2011 15:39:12 GMT -5
Post by ***Stormchaser*** on Apr 10, 2011 15:39:12 GMT -5
ok
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Apr 10, 2011 15:39:30 GMT -5
Post by BeautifulDreamer on Apr 10, 2011 15:39:30 GMT -5
yeah i did it says
'I felt a small pressure against my back push my forward'
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Apr 10, 2011 15:44:36 GMT -5
Post by ***Stormchaser*** on Apr 10, 2011 15:44:36 GMT -5
ohhh so she was pushed!
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Apr 10, 2011 15:45:32 GMT -5
Post by BeautifulDreamer on Apr 10, 2011 15:45:32 GMT -5
^^
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